Griff
Knight
Deputy Mischief Maker
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Post by Griff on Apr 7, 2015 7:40:04 GMT 10
Series: Little Boats #1 Title: Sinking ships Rating: PG Event: 110 Word Hurdle Competition: Decathlon Words: 110 words Summary: Keladry hears an unlikely knight fight with the king.
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She never expected her impression of him to change. The Chamber spared him where his boyhood friends broke against the rocks and that, perhaps, is when she should have reconsidered what this desert man was made of. It would have been easier, a simple adjustment of the rudder on rolling seas instead of this teetering on top of the breakers as he stormed out of the king’s study, nostrils flaring to fuel his fury. The hair on his neck prickled before he turned, dark eyes snapping to meet hers, steady despite the heavy heaving of his chest. In his eyes, she saw his own impressions roll.
Her little boat capsized.
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Post by mistrali on Apr 7, 2015 19:26:21 GMT 10
Whoa, those are some intense second impressions. Nice punchy last sentence, too, and great metaphor throughout!
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housewife
Soldier
Wavelet transform from Aguasonic Acoustics
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Post by housewife on Apr 10, 2015 14:14:42 GMT 10
Jon needs a couple of good people to argue with him. I am intrigued.
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