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Post by wordy on May 29, 2013 13:58:50 GMT 10
Title: Guard Rating: G Word Count: 193 Pairing: Alanna/Jonathan Round/Fight: 3A Summary: In the practise yard. A/N: AU. Part of my Duplicity series: Alanna goes to the convent…until Thom begs her to swap places with him. Pretending to be a boy is difficult enough, but pretending to be her brother? A whole ‘nother story.
“Good work, Thom,” said Prince Jonathan, sounding surprised. “You’re improving.”
Alanna bit her lip to stop from making a snide remark and let her shield arm drop to her side. She hadn’t expected how aggravating it would be, pretending to be her brother: Thom had never been good at hunting or fighting, and every bit of encouragement that she received now only hurt her pride.
“I’ve been practising,” she said, which was only the truth.
“Well, keep it up.” Jonathan wiped his sleeve against his forehead, before raising his practise sword again.
The older pages would be squires soon, which meant that she would only have those in her own year to spar with, at least. Douglass and Geoffrey seemed like good enough fellows; they had warmed to her, a little, and kept their thoughts to themselves during practise bouts.
She felt strange, thinking poorly of the prince when he had only been kind to her. But she was not Thom, though she now answered to his name; she could not get along on her own, and she was beginning to see that Jon—not only Prince Jonathan—was a friend worth having.
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Post by housewife on Jun 12, 2013 15:22:16 GMT 10
I really like the way you're making Thom and Alanna's differences in character known, even though Thom's not in the scene. I can just imagine Alanna trying to act isolated like her brother but also trying to make friends, and do it all with a gradual enough progression that no one suddenly thinks it's someone else.
I've also just thought, it must be quite amusing for Thom to pretend to be a girl!
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