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Post by mistrali on Jan 22, 2013 22:20:57 GMT 10
Title: Call of the Wild Rating: PG-13 Prompt: #2 (Hauntings) Summary: Even after Rosethorn's recovery, the garden haunts her dreams. Warnings: SPOILERS for HitV/Briar's Book, character death, horror.
Notes: Written and crossposted to FFN as part of my five-sentence Lark/Crane/Rosethorn series, Roll Away Your Stone, for the prompt 'call of the wild'.
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Call of the Wild
Rosethorn knew she must be dreaming, but here she was, listening again to the death-garden's whisper, somehow louder than the clamour of nettle, prickly pear and onion-grass run amok.
A leaf drifted across her path; she followed it and saw Briar and Crane grappling over a shakkan birch, its twigs soaked with their dwindling power. "Stop, it's leaching your magic!" she called, and reached to warn them... they dissolved, and here was Lark, singing as she spun a nightshade-and-ivy cocoon around herself. Rosethorn groped for a healing ointment, terrified, as Lark's skin broke out in angry blotches and she began to cough violently. The girls were nearby, giggling as they melted, half-flesh, into magic that might have been water, or thread, or flame...
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Post by Kris11 on Jan 23, 2013 6:56:09 GMT 10
GAH
That was scary. I liked that you just wrote us this snippet of Rosethorn's dream, and how her understanding that it is a dream fades away into the nightmare. Amazing descriptions, this one in particular: 'louder than the clamour of nettle, prickly pear and onion-grass run amok' was really vivid and lovely.
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Post by mistrali on Jan 23, 2013 10:47:35 GMT 10
Thank you so much! I'm glad the horror of it came through. I may write a nice fluffy sequel to this, where she wakes up and Lark comforts her, because after that sort of nightmare she deserves it!.
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Post by wordy on Jan 23, 2013 11:06:03 GMT 10
Amazing descriptions, this one in particular: 'louder than the clamour of nettle, prickly pear and onion-grass run amok' was really vivid and lovely. This! Such great descriptions, and I love the horror element. I'd like to see more fics with this sort of feel.
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Post by mistrali on Jan 23, 2013 11:22:22 GMT 10
I'll see what I can do with the 'Addiction' prompt, wordy. And thanks!
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Post by Kris11 on Jan 23, 2013 11:27:03 GMT 10
I may write a nice fluffy sequel to this, where she wakes up and Lark comforts her, because after that sort of nightmare she deserves it!. Yes, for sure!
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Post by housewife on Feb 12, 2013 10:43:04 GMT 10
You have very evocative a writing style, because I think I now need a hug.
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Post by mistrali on Feb 12, 2013 17:25:04 GMT 10
You have very evocative a writing style, because I think I now need a hug. Thank you! *offers virtual hug* And I should write a fluffy follow-up to this where Rosethorn wakes up and Lark comforts her.
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Post by housewife on Feb 13, 2013 10:00:05 GMT 10
It would be like the literary equivalent of a hug
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