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Post by wordy on May 4, 2012 10:25:33 GMT 10
Series: Provenance Title: Beginning Rating: G Event: single sentence shot put Words: 39 Summary: With age comes wisdom.
At the end of the day she unbinds her feet and looks at the bare floorboards, at how far she’s come; foolishly, she had once believed that success would be her destination, an ending, but now she knows differently.
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Moony
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Post by Moony on May 20, 2012 2:26:55 GMT 10
You've perfectly balanced regret and knowledge and something a little darker. Perfect!
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Griff
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Post by Griff on May 27, 2012 18:32:46 GMT 10
You can feel the weight on her shoulders.
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Post by Alliecat on May 28, 2012 13:26:36 GMT 10
Beautiful! It's deep moments like these where I adore Yazmín.
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Muse
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Junior Overlord
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Post by Muse on May 29, 2012 11:40:53 GMT 10
It's so clear, this one moment in her life...very nice!
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Post by Tamari on May 29, 2012 13:39:58 GMT 10
This is absolutely breathtaking. My favorite part is the last, after the semicolon (although it's all wonderful).
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