kiz
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Post by kiz on May 2, 2012 7:31:19 GMT 10
Series: Draig Title: A Fistful of Nobles Rating: G Event: AU Hammer Throw Words: 100 Summary: I just think Liam would make a really good cowboy!
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He swung from his dusty saddle, spurs clinking against even dustier boots. What Liam wanted right now was a cold sarsaparilla, and he knew just the place to find one.
The doors swung inwards with a push. Liam ambled towards the bar. Trickles of conversation trailed in his wake like tracked in mud.
“Heard he toppled ol’ Skip Monterey,”
“Better hope there ain’t no capers, not with him in town.”
“Said he knocked Brisco out cold from where he stood, six feet away and without a pistol.”
Liam sipped his sarsaparilla and smiled. Everybody knew the Dragon of the West.
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Post by Tamari on May 2, 2012 7:34:10 GMT 10
Liam as a cowboy? Epic. I like your verbs- clinking, swung, ambled, traled. They give a very western feel. In this sentence: Trickles of conversation trailed in his wake like tracked in mud. Do you mean tracks?
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Griff
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Post by Griff on May 3, 2012 6:02:03 GMT 10
Liam, that leaves one last burning question.
Who's bed have your boots been under?
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Post by Kris11 on May 3, 2012 6:35:41 GMT 10
DIES I loved this story. I also think he would make an excellent cowboy... so much that I believe you should write this... As a full series. Great language, excellent cowboy attitude, I loved the whole idea - it was so original.
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Post by Kypriotha on May 3, 2012 19:04:39 GMT 10
Liam really *does* make an excellent cowboy! Great take on the event!
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Post by max on May 5, 2012 16:52:37 GMT 10
This. Is. So. Awesome.
Your imagery enhanced the whole mood of the (presumed) saloon he went into soo fabulously - the tracked-in mud analogy was perfect...
'Dragon of the West' love, tooooo.
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Post by Muse on May 29, 2012 13:03:47 GMT 10
Yes, Liam is a wonderful cowboy! *luffs*
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