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Post by kiz on May 1, 2012 11:47:10 GMT 10
Series: Draig Title: Sophrosyne Rating: PG Event: 110 word reverse hurdles Words: 110 Summary: Liam finds that there is a darker side to being the best.
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Liam dropped to his knees and wept.
When he knocked him down, Liam had felt a smug surge of pride. And then he had noticed the crushed windpipe; the wide, unseeing eyes.
The fight had been good natured, albeit aggressive. But Calhoun was as slippery as the snake for which he was named and when he skidded to one side, Liam’s punch hit him squarely in the throat.
It had seemed like such a natural progression, testing Dragon versus Snake, giving the inn’s patrons something exciting to brag about back home. After all, how often does one get the chance to see two Shang warriors spar?
This story ends in tragedy.
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Post by Tamari on May 1, 2012 11:59:05 GMT 10
This is great! It's so sad, but it makes the things Liam says in LR make much more sense, since he has made those mistakes before, if that makes sense.
I read it from top to bottom, and then from bottom to top, and it makes sense both ways. Great job on the event!
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Griff
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Post by Griff on May 1, 2012 11:59:21 GMT 10
Oh, ouch. Ouch, ouch, ouch.
Love this character piece!
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Elsceetaria
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Post by Elsceetaria on May 1, 2012 15:43:44 GMT 10
Aw, this is so sad, but wonderful.
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Kris11
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Post by Kris11 on May 3, 2012 1:51:46 GMT 10
I was hoping to read a couple of these reverse hurdles, as I was a little confused and unsure about how to write one myself. This didn't help, as it is too good! lol- I don't think I could have fashioned it so well. Great story here, very well put together, believable and sad.
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