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Post by Alliecat on May 31, 2012 4:04:48 GMT 10
Series: We the Kings Title: Centered on Regret Rating: PG Event: 110 reverse hurdles Words: 110 Summary: Gary can’t see forward, only back to the moment he put Alanna in danger.
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“All this for my terrible judgment.” Gary murmurs to Jonathan, who remains silent. The foreign diplomat advances towards Alanna, blade out. She limps towards him, and Gary flinches when he sees the trench her foot leaves.
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Wearily, Gary explained the situation to Alanna.
“I’ll be fine,” she declared.
He’s not so sure.
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Gary knocks on Jonathan’s door before entering. “They’re here.”
Jon winces. “I’d hoped they weren’t anymore.”
“They’ve brought a knight.”
“I’m not surprised. Have you told Alanna?”
“She’s injured!”
“They’d challenge her anyway.”
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“The Carthakis intercepted my package to the Yamanis,” Gary says.
Jon whitens. “That one?” he stutters.
Gary nods. “The one where we called them cowards.”
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Post by Tamari on Jun 2, 2012 12:43:55 GMT 10
This is great! It works with the reverse format very well. And even with the reverse format, you still have that fabulous last line!
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Post by kiz on Jun 5, 2012 4:04:25 GMT 10
What a great opening line! Awesome use of the reverse hurdles.
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