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Post by Deleted on Aug 31, 2011 7:24:05 GMT 10
Title: Skies are as Wide as You Make Them Rating: G Word Count: 147 Card: Summer Bingo: (Somewhere New + Freedom + Picnic + Fruit + Riding) Summary: Evvy, just before entering Emelan. Pre-WotE
Evvy didn't like new horizons. They tended to promise joy and freedom, only to breach the bargain; it only took one power-hungry, deluded, maniacal...
"Evvy. You coming down or not?" Briar rattled the basket of food. Further ahead, Rosethorn had already begun spreading the blanket.
Despite years of traveling, Evvy didn't like riding any more than she liked new horizons, or her horse liked her. (She was stone, heavy and unyielding.) She scrambled from her perch.
As Briar ambled over to set out the food, Rosethorn returned, watching her thoughtfully. "Duke Vedris is fairer than any other ruler I've ever met. If you really hate it, you can leave."
Evvy bit her lip to keep from laughing. But Ludo's presence was warm in her hands, and if she followed Briar's hands, the riot of shifting color, she could see him laying out fruit.
She did like peaches.
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Post by gear on Aug 31, 2011 7:30:14 GMT 10
This is really good. I can't quite pinpoint what I love about it, but I think it has something to do with all the little details that make up the larger picture.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 31, 2011 7:43:36 GMT 10
Thank you. Since I can only include small details in short ficlets anyway, I'm glad it works.
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Post by journeycat on Sept 1, 2011 12:41:54 GMT 10
I'm not a fan of Evvy, but I find her appealing here, with her uncertainty and adaptability.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 1, 2011 12:45:56 GMT 10
That's the highest possible praise: to write a character someone dislikes and not have it drag down the story.
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