aurorax
Queen's Rider
Captain Crazy
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Post by aurorax on Jul 4, 2011 11:16:11 GMT 10
Title: Spun Glass Rating: PG Couple/Character: Kally Event: Single sentence short put Words: 64 Summary: A princess loses her fairytale.
Fear is something foreign to Kally—not, she knows, a testament to her courage, but a reminder that her world is a fragile fairyland of spun glass and half-truths—so when the Carthaki ships swarm the harbor of Pirate’s Swoop, she isn’t sure whether her tears are for the enemy or for the too-perfect world of her childhood that has been shattered beyond repair.
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Post by journeycat on Jul 5, 2011 4:26:39 GMT 10
In one little sentence, you've portrayed Kally's bitter loss of innocence powerfully, and beautifully. I would quote the bits I like, but, frankly, I'd end up quoting the whole sentence.
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Kit
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Duchess of Emelan
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Post by Kit on Jul 5, 2011 5:51:09 GMT 10
This is stark, and brings to mind all sorts of questions: Kally witnesses this, and then marries into the Carthaki empire? Of course, we know that, but your lovely work makes the situation seem even more complex.
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Elsceetaria
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Post by Elsceetaria on Jul 6, 2011 5:19:59 GMT 10
Very prettyful.
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Post by mistrali on Jun 10, 2013 20:42:20 GMT 10
Oh, I love this, and I agree with Kit that it puts a while new spin on Kallydar.
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