sidonie
Soldier
lunatic, lover, and poet
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Post by sidonie on Jul 2, 2011 5:06:18 GMT 10
Title: Wedding Rating: PG Couple: Roald/Zahir Event: Single sentence shot put Words: 18 Summary: They seem so happy.
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It was horrifically unfair that Roald and Shinko looked so radiant on the worst day of Zahir's life.
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Post by journeycat on Jul 2, 2011 5:13:02 GMT 10
I adore the direct way this was written - it's like a punch to the gut, the sharp contrast to Roald's happiness and Zahir's clear unhappiness.
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luinae
Rider Trainee
crazy girl
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Post by luinae on Jul 2, 2011 5:24:34 GMT 10
It packs a lot of impact in so few words.
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Post by Seek on Jul 6, 2011 0:44:33 GMT 10
*crack* Do you hear that, Si? That's the sound of my shipper heart breaking
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Jul 7, 2011 10:57:48 GMT 10
There's not a wasted word, and not anything else that needs to be said to make this point. Very nice.
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