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Post by wordy on Jul 1, 2011 10:07:53 GMT 10
Title: Winter is Coming Rating: G Couple/Character: Daja/Wyldon Event: 110 word hurdles Words: 110 Summary: A mage at Mastiff. A/N: I’m quite proud of my editing/rewriting skills for this one. Originally, I had intended it to be the 100 word dash, but it ended up being 224 words. Title shamelessly stolen from George RR Martin.
His arm ached. There was nothing for it but to grit his teeth and carry on. The girl did not seem to like the cold either, though she appeared to be coping better than he was. She sat by the fire, apparently lost in thought. Her dark skin shone richly in the firelight and he found himself reminding himself, not for the first time, that this girl was a woman, and a mage at that. He could not help but glance up at her from time to time. Rather than discomfit him, her foreignness only made her more intriguing. Like a banked fire waiting to be stirred back to life.
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Post by journeycat on Jul 1, 2011 10:15:44 GMT 10
Ooooh, this is fascinating! For some reason I assumed it would be Wyldon in Emelan, but Daja in Tortall is totally awesome. I love how the voice is so very Wyldon, and the way he is so intrigued by her. And I, of course, love the title.
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sidonie
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Post by sidonie on Jul 1, 2011 10:17:48 GMT 10
Lovely! The contrasting images of warmth and cold are beautiful, and I love the last line. Also, I squeed uncontrollably when I saw the title.
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Post by wordy on Jul 1, 2011 10:21:29 GMT 10
Thanks guys! I may try some Wyldon-in-Emelan yet - I have to get writing.
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Post by queenscovegirl on Jul 1, 2011 11:00:12 GMT 10
This was lovely, and I love how interested Wyldon is in her. I'm also pretty impressed you managed to go from 224 words to 110, I'm jealous of your editing skills
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luinae
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Post by luinae on Jul 1, 2011 12:36:59 GMT 10
I love the comparison between Daja and the fire and how Wyldon wants to wake them both!
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Kit
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Post by Kit on Jul 1, 2011 13:08:41 GMT 10
Wyldon, you are secretly poetic and I love you dearly.
Em, your writing is so good that now I'm just addressing the characters directly.
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Post by Lisa on Jul 1, 2011 22:46:21 GMT 10
Ah, Wyldon's voice really is perfect in this.
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Muse
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Post by Muse on Jul 8, 2011 14:15:18 GMT 10
I love how this focuses on their similarities; I wouldn't have thought them similar at first, but you have me totally convinced. And further intrigued!
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