domluvr
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Post by domluvr on Mar 8, 2011 9:52:12 GMT 10
Title: Evin’s Mistake Rating: PG-13 Word Count: 171 words Pairing: Dom/Evin - Team Underpants Round/Fight: 1A Summary: Dom’s world comes crashing down.
Breathing hard, Dom placed a gentle kiss on his lover’s chest. He smiled, despite the circumstances, as the blond hairs tickled his lips. Resting his head on the hard chest before him, he waited; something was wrong, he knew.
On the surface, tonight had been passionate, if not quite so rough as usual. But there was something different. Urgent, but at the same time… it had seemed as if Evin had been a little too aggressive in trying to prolong their sensuous passion. Usually it was Dom that couldn’t get enough.
Wrapping his arms around Evin’s waist, he gave a gentle squeeze. What could possibly be so bad, when they lay here like this?
When he felt Evin take a large breath, Dom’s muscles involuntarily tensed; familiar fingers began to run through his hair.
“Dom,” Evin’s quiet voice finally came. Closing his eyes, Dom tried to concentrate on the comforting hand getting tangled through his hair, knowing that somehow this moment was about to be pulled away from him.
“Miri’s pregnant.”
QC by: wordy
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sidonie
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Post by sidonie on Mar 8, 2011 10:01:05 GMT 10
WOAH. What a powerful ending. I really like it, especially the way you mingle sweetness with the not-so-small problem.
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domluvr
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Post by domluvr on Mar 8, 2011 12:15:31 GMT 10
Thank you!
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Kris11
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Shipping in Circles
I am so confused when did I change my name
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Post by Kris11 on Mar 10, 2011 13:36:12 GMT 10
Great job! I liked the description and you told the story really well in a short space; everything is anticipated so we don't actually have to see what comes next.
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Post by pandora on Mar 25, 2011 12:31:51 GMT 10
And they'll all raise the baby together, one big happy family... right? This is really good Crystal, I like the build up of tension, I think I was holding my breath along with Dom
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