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Post by Lass on May 4, 2009 13:52:33 GMT 10
Title: 4, not 5 Rating: G Prompt: Numbers Category: Up to 250 Word count: 109 Summary: For the Goldenlake Drabble Tournament. Comas listens.
Discipline Cottage was busy today. The four who were his idols were “home” for a visit. He stayed upstairs in his room, the door shut tight. He could hear his four heroes from where he sat at his desk.
“Sandry, leave my dress alone…it’s fine.” --- Tris.
“By the gods will I have no rest?” --- Daja.
“Oh hold still.” --- Sandry.
“Don’t be such a bleater. Here Sandry, you can hem my shirt.” ---Briar.
One, two, three, four… no more, no less.
The four mages continued to argue, unaware that Comas listened. He stared at his door with longing. He knew there could never be a fifth.
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Post by clairshadows on May 4, 2009 17:39:58 GMT 10
I really like this one
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Post by ubiquitous on May 4, 2009 20:13:13 GMT 10
Yay you entered it!
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Post by Verasque on May 4, 2009 21:37:08 GMT 10
A nice meaningful piece!
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Post by Lass on May 5, 2009 5:52:29 GMT 10
Thank you.
Yes, I entered it. Thanks for the prod.
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Post by kaossparrow on May 5, 2009 7:55:03 GMT 10
I agree completely with ubiquitous. Happy!
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Post by Lass on May 5, 2009 8:38:37 GMT 10
Thank you. ^^
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Post by PeroxidePirate on May 5, 2009 13:25:02 GMT 10
Awww. poor Comas. Very poignant. And yay for circle!fic! We need more circle!fic.
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Post by Lass on May 5, 2009 13:29:39 GMT 10
I am glad you like it. I adore Emelan. I tried to do Tortal, but nothing came to mind, but then Comas came in and I was like, "yay!"
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Post by Fenella on May 6, 2009 11:10:04 GMT 10
You did a wonderful job here capturing a strong sense of longing, or wistfulness, is so few words. Thanks for a great read!
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Post by Lass on May 6, 2009 11:15:13 GMT 10
You're welcome, thanks for reading.
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Post by Lisa on May 18, 2009 1:26:15 GMT 10
This is absolute sweetness... you did so much with so few words!
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Post by Lass on May 18, 2009 9:56:51 GMT 10
Gracias.
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Post by Vala on May 10, 2016 21:14:13 GMT 10
This is a great piece of writing, but sad too.
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