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Post by Alliecat on Mar 11, 2011 17:14:45 GMT 10
Title: Ice Rating: G Word Count: 169 Pairing: Jon/Zahir – Team Bend-a-lot Round/Fight: 1A Summary: The chill burns, leaving only raw skin behind.
“Your sword skills have developed quite suitably, Zahir,” King Jonathan commented. His tone was brisk and expression withdrawn, as if such remarks were purely ceremonial.
As far as Zahir knew, they were.
“Thank you, sire.” Zahir kneeled and bowed his head, his eyes hidden from view. A breeze ruffled the curtains, allowing a thin slice of moonlight to cut across Zahir’s cheek. Tensing, he paused and waited for any sign of personal involvement from his king. The silence stretched, twisting and turning through its awkwardness.
“The practice courts at dawn.” Jonathan’s tone remained crisp, and Zahir, almost reluctantly, raised his head. “Yes, sire.” He rose, stumbling slightly on the uneven stone floor. No proper dismissal was offered. Zahir understood his king’s subtle signals, as was expected.
It was the first anniversary of Zahir’s squiring commitment to King Jonathan, but there had been no celebration, no acknowledgement, only slim acceptance.
For his pains, Zahir received nothing but ice.
It is of no help to his wounds. It will never be.
QC by: journeycat
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Post by nicolababola on Mar 12, 2011 0:27:20 GMT 10
This is really pretty, and i love how you focus on a negative aspect of their relationship because smackdown isn't just about romance.
thanks so much for writing this!
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Post by journeycat on Mar 12, 2011 2:57:35 GMT 10
I agree with Nicola - I love how you've portrayed their relationship as cold and unaffectionate. It makes it doubly fascinating!
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luinae
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Post by luinae on Mar 12, 2011 8:19:50 GMT 10
This is lovely- it's so ice cold and difficult. There's just nothing there, and it was very chilling to read.
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sidonie
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Post by sidonie on Mar 12, 2011 18:06:50 GMT 10
Wow, this just hurts, but in a good way. Very melancholy and pretty.
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