sidonie
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Post by sidonie on Mar 9, 2011 6:04:52 GMT 10
Title: Landscape Rating: PG-13 Wordcount: 158 Pairing: Jon/Zahir Fight: 1/A Summary: Zahir explores Tortall.
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A pale expanse, the vast plains of Tortall, full of dips and hollows and dusky glens, intricate and forever. A dark forest, devoid of light but not of warmth, trees slipping by as insubstantial-soft as shadows. The clear, crystal blue of the lakes and rivers, liquid and cool, their color mirroring the summer sky, undisturbed in their serenity. Intangible but ever-present, the salt tang of the ocean and the earthen musk of soil and sun, wreathed with the faintest trace of a flower's sweetness.
Zahir trails lazy fingers down Jon's chest, tracing the map of the country he has come to love on his monarch's body. He sketches the outlines of mountain ranges and canyons, the lightest silhouettes of stony behemoths patterned on smooth, yielding skin.
When his knight-master's lake-sea-sky eyes flutter open, they lace their dark-light fingers together and Zahir shows his king something of the desert, the glory and extremity, the fierceness, the overwhelming, everlasting heat.
QC by: journeycat
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Post by Seek on Mar 9, 2011 6:07:46 GMT 10
God, I love this. I love your description. 'Beautiful' is the best word I can manage. Forgive me. It's 4AM, but I just wanted you to know I loved this.
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Post by emberrose on Mar 9, 2011 6:54:27 GMT 10
^It's 1pm for me now, "Beautiful" sounds about right. Also tied with "Magnificent." ;D
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Post by ubiquitous on Mar 9, 2011 8:49:47 GMT 10
I love how descriptive your writing is. And I'll add that 'Beautiful' sounds just right at 9am too.
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Post by infinite on Mar 9, 2011 12:34:03 GMT 10
Oooh my good heavens. That was beautiful (at 1:31pm as at any other time). I myself struggle with description - this fic certainly gives me determination to improve on that front, as I can see how wonderful it can be!
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Post by nicolababola on Mar 9, 2011 15:57:25 GMT 10
Love!!! the last few lines were the best!
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Post by journeycat on Mar 10, 2011 4:44:40 GMT 10
Exceptionally written, sidonie! The imagery is so lush that I just drowned in it.
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sidonie
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Post by sidonie on Mar 10, 2011 7:37:50 GMT 10
Thank you so much, everyone! This is my favorite thing I've written so far, and I'm so glad you all like it.
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Post by Muse on Mar 21, 2011 13:36:29 GMT 10
Sidonie-- I love it. I love the poetic nature of your writing here, especially lake-sea-sky eyes and light-dark. The duality of it all is fascinating. (and super beautiful)
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