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Post by Deleted on May 9, 2011 14:07:32 GMT 10
Title: Close To My Soul Rating: G Word Count: 162 Pairing: Circlecest Round/Fight: 3/B Summary: Close to my soul/And yet so far away... Tris, Lightsbridge, and dreams. (Someday, #4)
Her first night at Lightsbridge, Tris dreams of Summersea, and the family she left there.
They're working. Sandry sits in the center of the dining room, a circle of red cotton thread enclosing her in a magical bubble at which Chime scratches ineffectually. Fabric forms beneath her fingers, and hints of gold and silver shimmer in the weave.
Briar has brought his plants there as well (though Tris is pleased to see that, per her snapped instructions, he's spread a cloth to keep falling dirt off the table) and is busy grooming his miniature trees.
They're speaking, smiling and bantering, and laughing as Daja's wry comments float into the room from the direction of the forge.
She cannot stop the wave of affection from rising at the sounds of their voices, the sight of their faces, because this is a dream. In dreams, you're allowed to show affection without embarrassment turning your cheeks red, and the unpleasant distance separating them is forgotten.
QC by: journeycat
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Post by Moony on May 9, 2011 22:43:36 GMT 10
I love how well you have captured each of them in their pursuits. The little bits about Chime and Briar's drop cloth make it all the more real and adorable. I also love how Tris is allowed to show emotions in dreams.
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Post by Deleted on May 10, 2011 6:25:57 GMT 10
Haha. When I was writing, the only thing I could think of was how pleased Tris would be that her hard work teaching the others had paid off. Plus, Chime is pretty so I had to mention her
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