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Post by kiz on Feb 4, 2010 5:51:05 GMT 10
Title: Revisions Rating: G Length: 198 Competitor: Uline Round: 1/H Summary: Kel was never much for poetics.
“Sometimes I think I should cut off all my hair,” Uline said thoughtfully. “It would never get snagged on anything again.”
Kel raised her eyebrows, but did not reply.
“Well, what do you think?” Uline pressed. “Should I cut off all my hair?”
“It would make riding with the royal ladies a lot less trouble.”
“That isn’t what you were supposed to say,” Uline tartly informed her.
Suddenly, Kel realized she was trapped. “What was I supposed to say?” She asked carefully.
Uline pursed her lips. “You are supposed to say, ‘Uline, never cut off your hair, for it shines like tortured midnight, and sends men to their knees at a weep,”
Kel made a face. “You would want my old sweetheart for that one. Or Neal.”
“It’s what you are supposed to say!”
“Uline,” Kel began playfully, “Whether you cut off your hair or no, you are still the loveliest thing on two feet. But if your hair truly does make men fall to their knees at a weep, I say don’t touch it, because that would be a real asset on the battlefield.”
Uline laughed, and decided that she liked the less dramatic revision even more.
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Post by Rosie on Feb 4, 2010 6:45:53 GMT 10
I love the light-hearted banter! Great fic.
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Post by max on Feb 4, 2010 7:50:27 GMT 10
Lol. So cute.
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Feb 4, 2010 8:16:27 GMT 10
Oh, that's perfect! Kel would be such a guy about stuff like that, but I just love her practicality.
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