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Post by PeroxidePirate on Feb 20, 2010 13:19:23 GMT 10
Title: Beautiful II Rating: PG-13 Length: 240 words Competitor: Buriam Tourakom Round/Fight: 1/E Summary: Kel has another way of seeing things.
"You don't trust me," Kel says, hurt obvious in her voice. Kel, in bed, is a different creature than Kel in the world. She is wholly honest, without artifice. This is why Buri's not ready: if Kel looks at her -- really looks at her -- and touches and tastes, her feelings will show. If her reaction is disgust or pity, or fear that this is what she might one day become, Buri is not ready.
"I won't be good at it," Kel continues, blushing. "Not like you are. You'll have to teach me. But I learn fast, and you can be honest with me. Can't you trust me enough to let me try?"
“It's not that.” Buri struggles to explain. “Only, you're so beautiful...”
When Kel laughs, it's a harsh, self-depreciating sound.
“You are.” Buri looks at Kel, taking her in. She runs hands along the younger woman's limbs, over her ribcage, across her cheeks. “All this fits together as it should. All of it works, as it should. You can do anything. You haven't spent twenty-five years riding and training and getting pounded and sleeping in the rain. I have. It's not pretty.”
“But I will,” Kel says, matter-of-fact. She takes Buri's hand, weaving their fingers together. Buri studies the contrast.
Kel looks at Buri, all seriousness, and kisses her cheek. “And what's more beautiful than the evidence that you are living?”
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Kit
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Post by Kit on Feb 20, 2010 14:48:44 GMT 10
"You don't trust me,"
That conversation, perfectly phrased and resolved.
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Post by Lisa on Feb 20, 2010 17:15:24 GMT 10
Buri's hesitations are beautiful, and Kel's "But I will" warmed my heart.
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Post by greenie on Feb 20, 2010 18:40:44 GMT 10
I love how Kel is so matter-of-fact, it's exactly what she'd be like.
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Feb 21, 2010 10:04:31 GMT 10
Thank you for all the lovely comments!
<-- wishes to be as straightforward, matter-of-fact, and without drama as Kel.
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