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Post by PeroxidePirate on Feb 20, 2010 13:19:03 GMT 10
Title: Beautiful I Rating: PG-13 Length: 210 words Competitor: Buriam Tourakom Round/Fight: 1/E Summary: Twenty years as a warrior takes a toll.
Note: I'm not sure this is in character, for Buri, and I'm not entirely sure where it even came from. But here it is.
Kel's body is strong and whole and perfect. Yes, there's a bruise here and a scar there -- she's a squire, after all. But her legs are not bowed from too many years in the saddle. Her wrists are not stiff from being strained and sprained and over worked, again and again. Her ribs are not uneven from being broken and healed without a healer. Her nose is not crooked. Her belly and thighs are not marked with the evidence of weight lost, and gained, and lost, and gained once more. The skin of her arms and cheeks and neck is not weathered to the texture of cheap paper from much too much time in the sun. She has not even lived the number of years that Buri has spent demanding the physically impossible of herself.
As Buri's hands and mouth learn the details of Kel's body, her mind memorizes, like it never did – with even the most flawless of her lovers – when she was Kel's age. This is perfect, and this, and this.
When Kel is finished sighing in utter bliss, when she leans up and catches Buri's mouth in a kiss, when she seems about to return the favor, Buri draws away.
"Don't," she says, gruffly. "I'm not ready."
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Kit
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Post by Kit on Feb 20, 2010 14:47:11 GMT 10
I think that we so little of Buri, really, that this could well be in character for her. In character with her, with Kel, who is, by Lady Knight so sure in her own body. This makes my heart ache, because I've been there, and it is beautifully written.
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Post by Lisa on Feb 20, 2010 17:13:43 GMT 10
I adore this piece - especially the end. Buri is - at times - a very mysterious character who holds her cards so close to her heart. The throwaway line about the most flawless of her lovers was gorgeous.
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Post by greenie on Feb 20, 2010 18:00:12 GMT 10
Wow, this is beautiful! I can really see Buri thinking and acting like this too.
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Feb 21, 2010 10:02:45 GMT 10
Thank you! I'm so glad this one worked the way I wanted it to.
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