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Post by Lisa on Feb 5, 2010 1:07:06 GMT 10
Title: Home Wrecker Rating: G Length: 103 words Competitor: Wyldon Round/Fight: 1/A Summary: Lisa listens to Blue October while writing fanfiction…. Let’s look at this thing from another angle.
It was impossible to look at him. Almost thirty years of marriage, of love, of knowing his faults and still thinking him the most wonderful man she’d ever known – all of this was dashed with the knowledge of what he’d done. What he’d continued to do with the lady knight.
“You have every right to hate me, Vivenne.”
“I know,” she replied coldly. “I have every right to take you to the temple of the Goddess and dissolve this marriage.”
“You would break our family apart?” His voice was low and steady. She couldn’t read his emotions. As usual.
“No, Wyl. You would.”
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MinPin
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Post by MinPin on Feb 5, 2010 1:42:18 GMT 10
Oh wow. I don't really know what else to say. She's right, it is his fault.
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Post by journeycat on Feb 5, 2010 1:58:13 GMT 10
The last line was so powerful - I like this, because it gives you another perspective of Wyldon.
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laura
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Post by laura on Feb 5, 2010 7:07:14 GMT 10
I like the parallel between Wyldon and Kel--how hard it is to read their emotions. And this definitely needed to be done. Good job!
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Post by Rosie on Feb 5, 2010 7:56:54 GMT 10
Fantastic! I love the fact that she still slips into using a nickname for him at the end.
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Post by ubiquitous on Feb 5, 2010 9:00:34 GMT 10
Fabulous fic! I adore the last line.
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Post by Lisa on Feb 5, 2010 9:57:17 GMT 10
Thanks, guys. I had initially planned on using "Wyldon" for that last line, but I like that Vivenne's the only one close enough to give him a (non-Stump) nickname, and to use it in that moment would deliver a punch.
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