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Post by journeycat on Feb 5, 2010 15:12:41 GMT 10
Title: Doomed Rating: G Length: 102 words Competitor: Wyldon Round/Fight: 1/A Summary: She cut straight through him, a griffin-fletched arrow.
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It took one look, and he was caught.
That was how it started—a glance from underneath her long, curling lashes, and he imagined he could feel them brush his cheek when she blinked.
It took one smile, and he was trapped.
The curve of her lips was an exquisite thing. They were full, a woman’s mouth, and quick to turn up into a smile. He began to live for those smiles. And he would die for her laughter.
It took one kiss—just one, a soft meeting of lips, with her hand clutching girlishly at his shoulders—and he was doomed.
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Post by Rosie on Feb 6, 2010 1:13:32 GMT 10
This flows beautifully! I love the repetition - very effective.
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Post by Lisa on Feb 6, 2010 6:42:06 GMT 10
the progression is stunning, and the repitition drives it home. beautiful!
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Post by Katty on Feb 6, 2010 23:29:34 GMT 10
Lovely!
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Post by ubiquitous on Feb 9, 2010 13:06:56 GMT 10
Lovely fic!!
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