opalgirl
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I also answer to Val.
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Post by opalgirl on Feb 8, 2010 2:36:01 GMT 10
Title: Second Best Rating: G Length: 196 words Competitor: Faleron Round/Fight: 1/B Summary: Princess Kalasin realizes she's fallen to be second best - again. ***** “She’s wondrous, Your Highness,” Faleron said, sitting on the rim of the fountain, an odd bit of water in the middle of the dry southern corner of Tortall. “No one expected her to last the first year, but she did. When she took on those bandits….” He trailed off, and there was a gleam in his eye: Squire Faleron was clearly impressed. Kally frowned and trailed her fingers in the clean water, scuffing her feet against the stones of the open courtyard. She was not used to being second-best. But Squire Keladry had clearly won. “… and, Mithros, she jousted against Lord Wyldon and walked away.” Faleron was still talking. “Do you know how many men don’t?” Kally wanted to stamp her feet and shout at him. She was here, she was in front of him, and she had done her best to draw his attentions. While the realm’s first openly female page and squire trained alongside him, and became his friend, she had been groomed to be well-mannered, graceful, and beautiful: the perfect princess. It wasn’t enough to impress him. Once again, she fell second to the girl who’d been allowed to have her dream.
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Feb 8, 2010 2:43:38 GMT 10
Poor Kally! There are so many fascinating possibilities involving her.
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Post by journeycat on Feb 8, 2010 3:56:30 GMT 10
Oh, I just love this - there's so many possibilities to explore with Kalasin and Faleron, and I think you wrote this one very well. I like how you've portrayed her as the "perfect princess" and yet always seemingly second-best to Kel. Very interesting!
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Post by wordy on Feb 8, 2010 9:30:39 GMT 10
Poor Kally, this is so sad!
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Post by Katty on Feb 8, 2010 23:46:26 GMT 10
Aww. Poor Kally!
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Post by Lisa on Feb 9, 2010 5:29:06 GMT 10
Aww, poor Kalasin. Faleron's freaking adorable.
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Post by dragonbat on Feb 10, 2010 5:29:53 GMT 10
Hee hee! Poor Kally!
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aurorax
Queen's Rider
Captain Crazy
Drabbling Away!
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Post by aurorax on Feb 11, 2010 10:59:13 GMT 10
Oh, this was heartwrenching. I love the double pain here, of Kally being jealous of Kel for stealing her love and her dream, and yet Faleron seems so sincere that you can't fault him for hurting her.
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Post by max on Feb 11, 2010 12:32:15 GMT 10
Ohh sad. Poor Kally.
Awesomely written though!
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Zanna-Banna
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Loving the Kel love
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Post by Zanna-Banna on Feb 18, 2010 9:29:23 GMT 10
Poor Kally! but great!
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