Post by PeroxidePirate on Mar 7, 2010 1:20:39 GMT 10
Title: Renewal 4
Rating: PG
Length: 158 words
Competitor: Raoul
Round/Fight: 2/A
Summary: There's one thing Kel needs to find out before she goes.
“You'll be going, then?” Raoul asked, obviously disappointed.
“For now.”
He stood when she did, and she let him take her hand. But when he would have brought her fingers to his lips, she cupped his chin, instead, and leaned up to kiss him properly. She took him by surprise, she could feel that in the way his whole body went still for a second before his arms came around her. But when he caught up with what was happening, she let him draw her close and for a moment, she gave herself over to the sensations.
When she drew back, she was smiling. “I had to make sure there was something worth coming back for.”
“And?”
“Don't beg for compliments,” she replied. “It isn't becoming.” She was out the door before he could respond, knowing that in a way, she had answered his question. Now she just had to find Buri.
Rating: PG
Length: 158 words
Competitor: Raoul
Round/Fight: 2/A
Summary: There's one thing Kel needs to find out before she goes.
“You'll be going, then?” Raoul asked, obviously disappointed.
“For now.”
He stood when she did, and she let him take her hand. But when he would have brought her fingers to his lips, she cupped his chin, instead, and leaned up to kiss him properly. She took him by surprise, she could feel that in the way his whole body went still for a second before his arms came around her. But when he caught up with what was happening, she let him draw her close and for a moment, she gave herself over to the sensations.
When she drew back, she was smiling. “I had to make sure there was something worth coming back for.”
“And?”
“Don't beg for compliments,” she replied. “It isn't becoming.” She was out the door before he could respond, knowing that in a way, she had answered his question. Now she just had to find Buri.
I'm enjoying the story so far. However, I never would have guessed Raoul to be one for subtlety. 
In my mind he's trying it, in the hope that he can avoid embarrassment if Kel's not interested... which won't work, because she's all about the directness here. 
Maybe once we'd have seen it during Smackdown!