GDT10: Imperfect, PG

[PeroxidePirate]

Title: Imperfect
Rating: PG
Prompt: #1 Feelings and Emotions
Category: 100 words
Word count: 100 words
Summary: One way or another, Briar's life is about to change.



Briar found a pile of baskets and bags in the hall of Number 6 Cheeseman Street. Upstairs, Ming stood in their bedroom, loading a pack. Her hair stuck out in all directions; her dark eyes were coldly patient.

“What's going on?”

She looked him in the eye. “I've fallen pregnant.”

“How-?” He stopped. Nothing is perfect, he knows. Sometimes life, itself, is stronger than droughtwort. A bubble of hope started in his belly, rising through him. “Ming, that's amazing.” He stepped toward her.

“Briar.” She crossed her arms, keeping him away. Her eyes never changed. “You aren't the father.”

[greenie]

Ouch, poor Briar.

I think the writing here is amazing, with all the different emotions you manage to show in such a small amount of words! It's like a rollercoaster in...I don't know, a bucket. *simile fail* Anyway, very impressive.

[PeroxidePirate]

Wow, thank you! This started out a lot longer, but I wanted to see if it would fit into 100 words.

[greenie]

That makes it extra awesome then! I've had to struggle to cut all of mine back to under 250 words. *rambly tendencies*

[darkakane]

Ouch!

[Rachy]

You've captured Briar perfectly, and heartbreakingly, in this.

[Rowena]

Woah! Great writing. Even in 100 words you showed Briar's (to borrow Ren's word) rollercoaster of emotions really well. Good job!

[PeroxidePirate]

Thanks for all the comments!