opalgirl
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Post by opalgirl on Jun 5, 2010 2:06:58 GMT 10
Title: Crab Caught Among Fish. Rating: G Prompt: #2--Feelings and emotions. Category: Up to 250 words Word count: 190 Summary: Miri feels like a crab caught in a net full of fish among these city folk. Notes: Recycling itty-bitty plotbunnies is fun. Also, I've hit the maximum number of drabbles I'm actually allowed to enter over in the Indoor Courts. *** Miri tried not to gape as she carried her battered leather bags. There was so much noise, so many things, and so many people. Gods, the city. She had been born in a village where she knew every face and most were kin by some measure. This … this was new. She felt as if she were a crab caught in a net of fish, here. She didn’t belong with these busy strangers, who lived in a world so different from hers. She knew it and doubtless they knew it. It showed in her hand-me-down homespun dress and shoes that had been resoled three or four times. Mayhap Ma was right, she thought, and this was foolish. Then she scolded herself. You made the choice, and you're just being silly now.Someday, she promised herself, she would come and visit the markets—they held so many things she'd never seen—and the grand temples that stood tall and bright before the palace. Someday, but not today—she didn’t trust herself to not become hopelessly lost. She shouldered her bags, carrying what all she owned in the world, and began to climb the hill.
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Post by max on Jun 5, 2010 7:32:21 GMT 10
This is lovely.
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Post by greenie on Jun 6, 2010 10:00:36 GMT 10
This is a really great look at Miri and what she'd be feeling. I've never thought about her experiencing the city like this, and I think you've written it really well!
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Post by Alliecat on Jun 6, 2010 13:40:36 GMT 10
Oh, this is a fantastic glimpse of Miri, and I love the metaphor!
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