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Post by journeycat on May 12, 2010 4:03:36 GMT 10
Title: Huntress Rating: PG Prompt: #2 Walk the line Category: 250 words Word Count: 236 Summary: She is beautiful, and he drowns in that; but she is also mad as a hatter, and it is that revelation which saves him. -----
She is a monstrosity of humanity—gorgeously deceiving, a lightning bolt with deadly aim. She is both snake and charmer and it is a lethal combination. He knows this, he knows that of which she is capable, but he is drawn to her like a moth to flame. It is her soft body and the flesh that molds willingly into his calloused hands; long blonde hair that smells of exotic danger. He loves to stroke the smooth white flesh and trace the curve of her blood-red lips.
But as easily as she caught him in her spell she can release him just as fast. He has a bite mark on his shoulder where she had savagely bit him in a fit of rage. She has a mouth like a sailor, and he wonders if Jonathan has ever felt the force of her barbaric wrath.
Of all the temper she has, though, it is her eyes that finally broke him—they were crazy and cruel, and he had never seen anything as frightening as them.
A true-bred princess of the Copper Isles, people remark, impressed when they saw her, for they too are caught in her snare of beauty. But Raoul knows the sharp blade that lays in waiting beneath the pretty and the glamor, and when she smiles he is reminded of the snarl of a wolf on the hunt, and he turns away.
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Post by Rosie on May 12, 2010 4:26:26 GMT 10
Fascinating character piece, on both parts, and your writing style was simply gorgeous for it - especially the line about being "both snake and charmer".
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Post by greenie on May 12, 2010 10:46:43 GMT 10
I second Rosie - that line was my favourite too.
I really liked how you kept me guessing who they were - I figured out it was Josiane about halfway through, but didn't realise it was Raoul until you said so.
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Post by PeroxidePirate on May 12, 2010 10:51:53 GMT 10
I LOVE this! I could see Raoul's experience with Josiane being part of what makes him mistrustful of matchmaking, too, because some other lady could end up being just as nuts.
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Post by journeycat on May 12, 2010 11:46:09 GMT 10
Thank you all so much! You make me regret having posted this in the Practice Courts. I appreciate your comments!
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Post by max on May 12, 2010 15:14:55 GMT 10
The ending was so brilliant. I loved this.
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Post by jazzyjess on Jun 1, 2010 8:00:54 GMT 10
(Please excuse me as I faint and/or spontaneously combust ) Fantastic job on this, Mandi! This definitely deserves having been put in the Indoor Arena! You've given a wonderful look at Josiane here, from the perspective of someone who has seen both sides - like the others, I love the line about being both snake and charmer. And I obv love the character choice!
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