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Post by Alliecat on Jun 6, 2010 13:44:21 GMT 10
Title: No More Time Rating: G Prompt: Feelings and Emotions Category: up to 250 words Words: 127 words Summary: It’s his last chance to be remembered. Note: Maybe a bit too OOC.
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Liam sighed and laid his pen beside the paper. He looked over the letter he had written, ensuring that it held everything that he wished to pour out to the Lioness. Liam knew that this would be his last chance to reveal all of his feelings to his past lover, training partner and friend before he joined the ranks of the esteemed past Shang.
He understood that their time as lovers had not been destined to last, but he still wanted Alanna to remember him for everything else they had shared. Would she remember their early morning fighting sessions? Would she treasure bond- albeit short in time- that they had formed?
He knew that the Shang would revere him- as was the culture- but would anyone else?
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Post by greenie on Jun 6, 2010 14:57:05 GMT 10
I don't think it's OOC at all! I think you bring out his humanity really well here, as opposed to the awe of him being the Shang Dragon.
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Post by domluvr on Jun 6, 2010 15:02:46 GMT 10
I agree! It makes him very human with valid concerns! Lovely!
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Post by Alliecat on Jun 10, 2010 7:47:13 GMT 10
Thanks guys!
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Post by Verasque on Aug 18, 2010 18:40:48 GMT 10
He knew that the Shang would revere him- as was the culture- but would anyone else?
I think the whole piece was controlled really well to come to this conclusive point. And it gives us a touching glimpse into his side of the story. Well done!
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