rainstormamaya
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Post by rainstormamaya on May 16, 2009 8:43:54 GMT 10
Title: Two Rating: G Prompt: Number Words: 200 Category: up to 250 Summary: Onua doesn't want to hire two assistants. No- what is she thinking of? They're too young. She ought to be sending them home to their Ma.
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“Beg pardon, m’m, but we heard you was hiring.”
Onua, who had just finished removing a stone from an unusually recalcitrant pony’s hoof, started and swivelled on her heels, where she was faced by a small procession.
A boy and a girl stood there, along with a grey pony carrying packs and two longbows. The boy had addressed her; he stood tall, and had the lanky look of a growing child, as did his sister. Both had the same thick, wavy brown hair and pale skin- and probably identical blue-grey eyes and stubborn chin, but Onua couldn’t see, as the girl was turned towards the pony.
“I’m Dren, and this’s my sister, Daine,” the boy said, meeting her eyes squarely, and Onua guessed that their mother had succumbed to the temptation to give twins similar names. “Daine don’t talk much. If’n she needs to talk, I does it for her. We’re both fair shots, and we’ve a knack with animals.”
I don’t want to hire two assistants, Onua thought to herself, but- no! What am I thinking? I don’t want to hire either of them. They can’t be more than fourteen. I ought to send them home to their Ma.
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opalgirl
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Post by opalgirl on May 16, 2009 9:19:50 GMT 10
Eeeee. Daine has a twin. I <3 you.
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Post by ubiquitous on May 16, 2009 10:28:31 GMT 10
Omg, cute!
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Post by clairshadows on May 16, 2009 17:09:29 GMT 10
This is wonderful. I love the idea of Daine as a twin
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Post by anilaurel on May 17, 2009 1:05:02 GMT 10
Nice, you could totally extend this. I wonder how Numair will handle them.
My plot bunnies are going insane in my head.
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Post by opalgirl on May 17, 2009 2:30:32 GMT 10
I wonder what Daine's twin will think when Numair begins romancing Daine? Also, the two of them running loose - and angry - in Carthak? Wow. I adore this. A lot.
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rainstormamaya
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Post by rainstormamaya on May 17, 2009 7:57:30 GMT 10
Thanks to everyone who commented! Ani: I definitely plan on extending it, maybe in some other drabbles for this challenge. It's in the same universe as my drabble Unexpected, with female!Numair (whose name is Giacinta) and yes, it's sending my plotbunnies crazy too... Opal: It's set in the same universe as my drabble Unexpected, so Daine/female!Numair (Giacinta) would a) take a while to develop and b) be kind of different from the actual quartet. It's actually getting kind of interesting in my head, though... The idea is developing in a scarily complex manner. I could have a new WIP on my hands.
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Post by opalgirl on May 17, 2009 9:39:07 GMT 10
Hmm. Maybe Daine's!Twin/Female!Numair, if you wanted to stick with the het aspect?
Or not pair them at all?
I'm interested.
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Post by rainstormamaya on May 17, 2009 21:17:51 GMT 10
I'm less bothered (well, actually, not remotely bothered!) about retaining the het aspect of it; I was thinking Giacinta/Daine and Dren/Miri in the far future? The characters are not necessarily the same. Giacinta is pretty much unchanged from Numair, excepting the obvious, but Daine takes a while longer to calm down from being skittish about her powers and her past and become more assertive, maybe because she has Dren to be assertive for her and she relies on him. I could see her originally attaching herself to Giacinta as someone she trusts, and that later growing into something more as she becomes more independent.
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Post by Lisa on May 18, 2009 1:16:00 GMT 10
interesting notion - I like this. If you do continue, it will be interesting to read.
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Post by Katty on Jun 24, 2009 16:05:44 GMT 10
Eee, great plot!!!
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Post by rainstormamaya on Jul 1, 2009 5:23:02 GMT 10
Thank you! I have a fic set early in Wolf Speaker in this alternate verse and about half of a how-Dren-and-Daine-left-Snowsdale fic knocking around on my hard drive, but I got stuck on the timing of that last one and never posted either of them.
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