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Post by ubiquitous on May 26, 2009 16:43:13 GMT 10
Title: Triumph Rating: PG-13 Warning: Character death Prompt: #1, Switch Category: 100 words Word count: 100 words Summary: He thanks the Gods for showing them.
Joren watches as they pull her lifeless body from the Chamber of the Ordeal. Her family rushes to her body, her sparrows circling above her, cheeping their sorrow as her dog whines below her. There is only a moment of silence as the observers realise she is dead. He calmly watches as chaos envelopes the room, unaffected by the drama taking place.
Nobody sees the spark of triumph that lights his eyes. Silently, he thanks the Gods for showing the progressives the error of their ways, and prays that the girl has a peaceful journey to the Black God’s Realm.
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Post by Rosie on May 26, 2009 17:59:06 GMT 10
Great switch! I like that Kel is identifiable by her companions - and the last line is excellent. I like that he's not vindictive; detached, then humane.
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Post by Seek on May 26, 2009 18:14:26 GMT 10
*worships* That is so spooky. In a sense, even, it's Joren as he should have been, calm and detached in a way only Kel could be since he got quite...nuts towards his end. I suppose it could be seen as a partly character-trait swap besides character swap xD It is disturbingly awesome
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Post by ubiquitous on May 26, 2009 18:27:40 GMT 10
Thank you!! I had it in mind for a while, but I just couldn't get it on paper, so I'm glad it works. ^.^
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Post by Lisa on Jun 10, 2009 13:03:17 GMT 10
I'm. in. love.
Seriously - what a splendid switch!!
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Post by ubiquitous on Jun 10, 2009 23:43:36 GMT 10
Yay, thank you!
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Post by zbilja on Jul 19, 2009 22:03:42 GMT 10
*Is in awe*
But right now I really want to see a sequel, with the whole who-kills-Blayce thing.
Just a thought. : )
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Post by ubiquitous on Jul 20, 2009 20:18:11 GMT 10
Eek! Plotbunnies! That may just happen.
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Post by zbilja on Jul 26, 2009 11:29:50 GMT 10
*laughs*
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