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Post by Cass on Aug 30, 2010 13:06:34 GMT 10
Title: Colors Rating: PG Word Count: 16 Summary: Neal is helpless.
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Green fire streams from his hands, but the red stain on Kel's shirt won't stop spreading.
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Post by Verasque on Aug 30, 2010 13:08:45 GMT 10
Beautiful, dangerous, and painful. All the right ingredients.
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Post by ubiquitous on Aug 30, 2010 13:10:01 GMT 10
Aww. So much, in so few words.
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Post by max on Aug 30, 2010 13:11:41 GMT 10
Oh this is wonderful.
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Post by journeycat on Aug 30, 2010 13:18:16 GMT 10
Oh, Neal - even though you didn't mention emotions at all, it's like I can feel his panic rising.
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Post by wordy on Aug 30, 2010 13:19:39 GMT 10
A very effective and emotive sentence!
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Post by Cass on Aug 30, 2010 13:32:33 GMT 10
Thanks!
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Post by Alliecat on Aug 30, 2010 14:13:37 GMT 10
Fantastic sentence- I love the implied emotion.
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Post by ev on Aug 31, 2010 5:08:13 GMT 10
How scary, poor Neal and Kel!
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Post by Lisa on Aug 31, 2010 5:34:14 GMT 10
Very powerful and effective!
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Rowena
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Post by Rowena on Aug 31, 2010 8:31:12 GMT 10
Wow - awesome sentance. I agree with Mandi, I can really feel the emotion.
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