Kit
Squire
Duchess of Emelan
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Post by Kit on Aug 31, 2010 2:22:28 GMT 10
Title: Practice Field Rating: PG Words: 29 Summary: Neal has made up his mind.
Looking at his too-young, too-old son as he struggled with the straw soldiers Baird's other lost children had spent years bludgeoning to death, the healer wondered what he had done wrong.
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Post by Lisa on Aug 31, 2010 2:37:10 GMT 10
You pack so much into so little, kit!
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Post by Cass on Aug 31, 2010 2:39:35 GMT 10
This is lovely!
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Post by journeycat on Aug 31, 2010 2:59:24 GMT 10
I love the "too-young, too-old" part, and I feel for Baird.
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Post by ev on Aug 31, 2010 4:34:54 GMT 10
This is really good!
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Rowena
Training Master
back to school... >.<
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Post by Rowena on Aug 31, 2010 8:57:15 GMT 10
Wow! Awesome sentance - I am amazed. I love the straw soldiers bit
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Post by max on Aug 31, 2010 9:40:10 GMT 10
So sad and so perfect and so vivid! You've packed so much of that instance into so few words.
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