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Post by queenscovegirl on Sept 25, 2009 6:48:58 GMT 10
Title: You'll like it, I promise. Rating: PG Warnings: Slightly spoofy I s'pose, slightly OOC? Summary: Dom want Kel to do something. AN: This just wouldn't leave me alone.
"Come on Kel, you'll like it. I promise."
"No Dom, I don't want to!"
"I can make it good for you..."
"No!"
"All you need to do is put your hand....there."
"Dom..."
"Now I'll just stick this here..."
"Dom, what about protection?"
Dom just stared at her.
"We need protection Dom! Its not safe!"
"Kel, we are attached to a bungee cord. How much safer can we get?"
Kel looked warily over the cliff. It was a very very long drop, and she wasn't crazy. Nor did she have a death wish.
"I really don't think this is such a good idea..."
Dom just tightened his grip around her waist.
"Dom?'
Dom took a step forward.
"Don't you dare!"
Dom jumped, sending them both plummeting down wards.
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"See? That wasn't so bad was it?"
Not so bad? She had very nearly peed herself!
"I hate you."
He did not look overly concerned. That was his mistake, because he would pay for this. In the practice courts.
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Post by Aris Dalton on Sept 25, 2009 8:22:32 GMT 10
LOL! You wrote it perfectly. They're a bit OOC and spoofy, yes, but it works well in this instance. I like the gutter approach at the beginning which then switches to a "Omigosh-are-they-insane?" tone. I wonder how Dom convinced her to go bungee jumping. The end part was in character for the most part, though.
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Post by queenscovegirl on Sept 25, 2009 14:38:59 GMT 10
Lol, Thanks I'm glad they are not too outlandishly OOC
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Post by ubiquitous on Sept 25, 2009 14:56:26 GMT 10
Hee, cute!
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Post by Verasque on Sept 25, 2009 16:01:32 GMT 10
LOL! Was not expecting that one Fun fic!
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Post by Seek on Sept 25, 2009 17:49:15 GMT 10
Hmm, I didn't exactly spot them going OOC, except, I think, Kel's exclamations. But the bungee cord was absolutely cool Especially when one was guttering since the sandwiches
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Post by ladyknight95 on Sept 28, 2009 3:20:37 GMT 10
Haha I love it! This was amazing.
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