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Post by mistrali on Jun 13, 2013 15:41:10 GMT 10
Title: New Life Prompt: #76 New Beginnings Rating: G Summary: Crane doesn't react well to Rosethorn's decision to move in with Lark. Other Notes: Written for the prompt 'a matter of luck' as part of my five-sentence L/C/R series Roll Away Your Stone. Same 'verse as "Logistics" - R&L meet later in life, at Winding Circle itself.
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New Life
Moving into the cottage meant taking a chance on something tested but still uncertain, like the first flush of green life in spring; it was a matter of luck as much as perseverance. She'd be giving up her dormitory room of eighteen months and going somewhere they could work to build a solid foundation for themselves and for those who, like Lark, had come from the streets or had had trouble adjusting to temple life.
"Don't expect me to visit for a few weeks; I'll be moving into Discipline with Lark. In Mead Moon," she added, as if that would halt the change of Crane's face from scarlet to pale.
"My best wishes; I hope you prosper with her," he said blandly, and before Rosethorn could speak, he turned and strode up to the Air temple without so much as a backward glance.
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“Every now and then I like to do as I'm told, just to confuse people.”
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Post by Vala on Nov 23, 2016 21:32:28 GMT 10
This is great! The words 'first flush of green life in spring' give the fic a sense of new life, and the fact that Crane doesn't look back, there are no regrets, all add to the feeling of moving on.
And even in three paragraphs, you've managed to perfectly capture Crane's personality, I can picture his face turning scarlet to pale, not just from the telling, but also from Rosethorn's words.
I love it! I don't know how you manage to say so much in so few words!
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Post by mistrali on Nov 24, 2016 5:53:23 GMT 10
Thank you
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Post by Vala on Nov 24, 2016 10:19:08 GMT 10
Thank you No problem
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Post by Katty on Jan 31, 2017 20:54:14 GMT 10
Love this! You've captured a nice mix of emotion - hope at the new beginning, but also a twinge of letting go.
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Post by mistrali on Feb 19, 2017 5:15:50 GMT 10
Love this! You've captured a nice mix of emotion - hope at the new beginning, but also a twinge of letting go. Thanks very much!
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