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Post by journeycat on Feb 8, 2010 7:14:24 GMT 10
Title: The Best of Both Worlds Rating: R Length: 176 words Competitor: Yuki Round/Fight: 1/H Summary: Yuki has both Tortall and Yamani in her bed.
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It was not so different than being with a man, and yet so very exotic.
She was used to the hard muscular body of Neal, with his calloused hands and stripes of scars; she had that with Keladry, and yet more. She ran fingers along the side of her small breasts, touched her pliable, full mouth with her own soft one. She felt dainty in her strong arms, and yet was very much the aggressor when she straddled the young knight and captured her mouth in a hot kiss. Her hand, stroking the hard plane of Kel’s thigh, felt a woman’s smooth skin and the ridges of a man’s scars.
Yukimi had come to Tortall expecting a new experience—and so it was, living among barbarians who had so little discipline that they could not even hide the basest of their emotions—but she had not expected part of that experience to include love.
In Neal, she had Tortall: brash and loud and open.
In Kel, she had Yamani Islands: disciplined, gentle, and full of secrets.
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Post by greenie on Feb 8, 2010 9:23:09 GMT 10
I love the way you show the contrast between Neal and Kel, and the two countries and cultures.
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Post by wordy on Feb 8, 2010 9:32:27 GMT 10
This is perfect! Love it
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Rowena
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Post by Rowena on Feb 8, 2010 10:20:59 GMT 10
This is great Again I agree with greenie about the contrast between Kel and Neal and the cultures. Good job!
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Post by Verasque on Feb 8, 2010 15:19:59 GMT 10
So smoothly worded. Lovely!
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Feb 9, 2010 12:29:08 GMT 10
This is beautiful.
I was totally playing with this concept, too! I think it would be a huge part of Kel's appeal. Turns out I couldn't write it, though. I'm glad you could and did.
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Post by Katty on Feb 9, 2010 13:22:25 GMT 10
Love it!!
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Post by max on Feb 10, 2010 17:54:23 GMT 10
Ohh. Beautiful.
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Post by Lisa on Feb 11, 2010 10:48:52 GMT 10
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Post by queenscovegirl on Mar 10, 2010 20:24:08 GMT 10
I love the description of Kel and how it is realistic but works wonderfully for the purpose of the story.
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Post by journeycat on Mar 11, 2010 2:08:01 GMT 10
Thank you everyone! ;D
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