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Post by fantail on Apr 19, 2010 18:31:02 GMT 10
Title: Protecting the Protector Rating: PG-13 Length: 209 Summary: Raoul is protecting someone very precious Author’s Notes: Based in a future Tortall, with the original characters reincarnated. The beginning of what I am thinking I might make into a series . . . Don’t know . . .
Detective Raoul Goldenlake looked down at the body of the little girl who’s head and lower legs had been severed. Her mousy brown hair had been cut short - pictures provided by the girls parents showed it had been long - , her green eyes open and staring blankly. She had long lashes and a delicate nose. As the body was being lifted to be placed in a body bag he saw that something had been attached to the back of her t-shirt. A picture of a sheild. With a double border, and an owl in the centre. Mindelan. Raoul looked to his partner, Flyndon Whiteford to see if he too had seen it. The look on his face told him he had. Raoul felt the blood in his veins freeze, as he thought of the little girl he had been keeping safe, who at this moment would be sitting down with Buri to do her homework. Blayce was back, and he was obviously going to kill every little Tortallan girl he came across who reminded him of Keladry of Mindelan. And he was making sure all her friends and family and everyone who was involved in the past lifetime knew he was coming for her . . .
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Post by wordy on Apr 19, 2010 18:44:30 GMT 10
Ohh this is fantastic! Great idea, I think Raoul and Flyndon suit the roles very well, and i think you should definitely continue with this!
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Post by Rachy on Apr 19, 2010 20:18:53 GMT 10
The last line is awesomely chilling. I agree that you should continue, this is great
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domluvr
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Post by domluvr on Apr 19, 2010 23:25:15 GMT 10
Oh my goodness! The last line gives me the creeps! This is great, you HAVE to keep going ;D
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Post by jazzyjess on Apr 21, 2010 2:52:59 GMT 10
I am so intrigued by this! Would be great if you kept it going
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Rowena
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back to school... >.<
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Post by Rowena on Apr 21, 2010 10:24:35 GMT 10
Oh, please continue it! Blayce suits the role of modern killer very well And the perspective on Raoul is great.
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