aurorax
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Post by aurorax on Jul 20, 2009 2:30:58 GMT 10
Title: Unrecognized Rating: PG Prompt: #7, Excess Words: 100 Summary: He had loved too strong, and now he sought just to forget.
A face stared back at him, the ripples distorting features already half-foreign. He should not still be awake, not after the vigil he kept last night. Still he sat transfixed, caught up in the depth of pain and desire burning in bloodshot eyes.
Then he drank, washing away the face that was not his own with numbing amber fire. Now all that gazed back at him was emptiness.
He had loved the boy too much, who tonight was a boy no longer.
As the street outside buzzed with news of the Duke’s death, Raoul raised another glass to Alan’s memory.
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Post by Katty on Jul 20, 2009 10:19:33 GMT 10
Oh wow! powerful and wonderfully provoking... i had to read it through twice to fully appreciate the fic
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Post by ubiquitous on Jul 20, 2009 11:55:17 GMT 10
Oooh, wow, wonderful fic!
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Post by Seek on Jul 21, 2009 2:08:11 GMT 10
Hoo, boy, this is awesome. Excess in that Raoul is overindulging in alcohol eh?
Hmm. A very interesting take on Raoul's reaction to knowing Alanna is Alanna. As in, not Alan. And it's quite fascinating to discover he doesn't really care for Roger much. Or so it would appear.
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Post by aurorax on Jul 21, 2009 2:18:35 GMT 10
Thanks so much! It ended up taking a different turn than I expected- originally I was just going to show Raoul's excessive drinking, but I needed a reason for it and I figured throwing in a little excessive Alan love as well couldn't hurt. As for Roger, I think he might have been a little jealous, because Roger and Alan always seemed to be thinking about one another...
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Post by Seek on Jul 21, 2009 2:23:41 GMT 10
Well, that makes it absolutely novel and cool. Great job! xD
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Post by thefangedone on Aug 14, 2009 5:04:34 GMT 10
Oh, this is great! I love how it shows Raoul's drinking past (POTS made me wonder), and just the whole thing was fantastic!
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Post by aurorax on Aug 14, 2009 13:07:24 GMT 10
Thanks- I always wondered about it too, Raoul just seems so in-control that I thought he'd have good reason for drinking.
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Post by Verasque on Aug 14, 2009 13:34:15 GMT 10
Amazingly poignant! Your words just flowed elegantly but precise. I like this side of Raoul you revealed; we don't get to see it often. Loved it
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aurorax
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Post by aurorax on Aug 19, 2009 0:33:58 GMT 10
Thanks!
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