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Post by Seek on Mar 28, 2014 3:35:04 GMT 10
Title: Erasure Rating: G Word Count: 14 words Summary: It doesn't take much to erase history. The fall of Barzun retold. Notes: I have another version below, as I could not decide which I favoured better. I do prefer the brevity of the former, but the latter lends more context.
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All it takes to erase centuries of history is a generation of Northern conquest.
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Alternatively:
All it takes to erase centuries of history between old Barzun and the tribesmen is a generation of Northern conquest.
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Post by Kypriotha on Mar 28, 2014 15:16:14 GMT 10
I personally like the first one better. One gains the necessary context from the summary and the brevity really packs a punch.
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Post by Seek on Mar 28, 2014 18:03:48 GMT 10
Thanks, Kyp--that was pretty much my thoughts as well! I just threw in the second to give some extra context if needed
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Post by housewife on Mar 31, 2014 18:54:31 GMT 10
This really makes me want to know more - about all of Tortall's history, really. (Especially going back to the Old Ones.)
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