Ankhiale
Training Master
The Village Fool
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Post by Ankhiale on Apr 14, 2013 7:14:29 GMT 10
Title: Sin Rating: PG Word Count: 204 Pairing: Alanna/Jon Round/Fight: 1/A Summary: I have not committed sin. Alanna and Jon discuss the afterlife that awaits them.
"Do you ever wonder what awaits us when we die?"
Alanna's head snaps up and her brows snap down. "No."
Jon toys with the glass in his hands. "Really?"
"Emphatically no." Alanna pauses. "That was a bit out of the blue, Jon. Where did this come from?"
Jon doesn't look up, doesn't look anywhere, just stares into his brandy as if it contains all the secrets in the world. After a long moment, he says, "I wonder, sometimes."
"Why?"
"Everyone says the Black God's realm is peaceful, and yet we also say that in his realm, all souls get their just punishments." Jon lapses into a fraught sort of silence. "I wonder what awaits me, there."
"I don't think about it." Alanna's eyes are intent on Jon's figure. "Jon, you're a good man. A good king. Even if the magistrates and my lord provost are right, and those of us with blackened souls meet our just reward there, I don't think you have much to worry about."
Jon turns, at that, and watches Alanna for a long, long moment. "You know better than that, Alanna."
The galling thing is, Alanna does. It is one of the many things kings and champions share, after all.
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Muse
Knight
Official Rogerfic Curator
Junior Overlord
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Post by Muse on Apr 16, 2013 13:44:15 GMT 10
The rhythm of "Alanna's head snaps up and her brows snap down" is phenomenal. Weirdly, it might be one of my favorite things in the fic, besides the fact that once again, you get the banter between Alanna and Jon spot on and I love it.
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Post by ubiquitous on Apr 16, 2013 20:58:56 GMT 10
I love the way you write these two, so at ease with each other.
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Post by mistrali on Jun 10, 2013 12:48:49 GMT 10
I like the contrast here between Alanna's refusal to speculate and Jon's morose contemplation. It's a difference between them that feels very true to canon. And it's clear that Alanna is no more comfortable thinking about the afterlife than Jon is; she'd rather live her life and take her consequences when they come. Those last two sentences in particular are very telling. Both of them are uneasy, but they choose to handle it in different ways.
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