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Post by Mirage on Apr 12, 2009 3:47:15 GMT 10
Title:Presence Rating: G Prompt: Hauntings. Summary: If only he could see her, past his own ghosts.
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She is in his room for a full ten minutes before he realizes her presence.
Even then, he only swivels a quarter of the way around in his chair, and spares the slightest shake of his head to indicate that whatever invitation she is intending, it need not be delivered.
“But-”
“Go away, Vania.” The words are harsher than he intended. But in this dim candlelight, when her hair seems darker, her body more familiar, and the indigo of her dress could almost be a shadow-dulled favourite Conte blue – he can’t afford pleasantries.
“But Roald…” That quiver wasn’t there before.
“I’m busy. Someone else can entertain you, surely.” He turns back to his desk without checking to see if she leaves.
She doesn’t, instead slipping into the shadows behind his door, waiting with a self-destructing need to know he lied. She gets it when Liam saunters in mere minutes later. He is not sent away.
Then there’s nothing left but to bow her head and slip out of the room, like the ghost her brother believes her to be.
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Post by Lisa on Apr 12, 2009 4:29:38 GMT 10
Ouch! I love this idea - and I like the shadow-dulled Conte blue. That was a lovely touch!
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Post by Anaroriel on Apr 12, 2009 5:51:47 GMT 10
Ooh, I like this idea too. Very beautifully written too. I also liked the shadow-dulled Conte Blue. And you could almost feel the pain of rejection as you read this. Lovely drabble!
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Post by Mirage on Apr 13, 2009 9:12:25 GMT 10
Thank you both~! Hmm...so now I'm wondering about the interruption in that line. The favourite was a last minute add anyways, think I should take it out?
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Post by Lisa on Apr 14, 2009 9:26:28 GMT 10
No, no!! It has a fantastic impact on the reader.
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Post by ubiquitous on Apr 14, 2009 9:46:13 GMT 10
Poor Vania. Wonderfully written, a lovely drabble!
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Post by Anaroriel on Apr 14, 2009 12:49:35 GMT 10
No! I like the favourite! I'm just too lazy to type it.
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Post by Mirage on Apr 16, 2009 12:35:56 GMT 10
LOL; thank you, thank you, and thank you again!
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