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Post by PeroxidePirate on Mar 31, 2010 15:01:09 GMT 10
Title: Trickster's Pawn 30 Rating: PG Length: 235 words Competitor: Owen Round/Fight: 4 (Final!) Summary: PG, 235 words. Epilogue, part 2: Kel and Owen catch up on each other's lives.
A head of disarrayed, curly hair appeared in the doorway of the nearest tent. “Who's there – oh, hello!” called Owen, crossing the space to greet Kel and Merric. He held out his arms, giving Kel a brisk, almost brotherly hug.
“How have you been?” Kel asked, stepping back.
“Jolly, especially lately.”
“And have you met my husband? Merric, this is Owen of Jesslaw. Owen, this is Sir Merric of Hollyrose.”
The two men exchanged greetings; Merric was relaxed, and Owen as cheerful as ever. Kel felt the lifting of a bit of tension she didn't know she'd been carrying. She and Merric were happy together, but in some corner of her mind, she had been wondering if her first lover had faired as well.
“Have you met Gydo?” Owen asked, with exactly the same emphasis as Kel had used when mentioning Merric.
Kel looked at him, one eyebrow raised, and he gave her the slightest of nods.
She grinned. “Your second in command?”
“Riders,” Merric said, shaking his head – but it was obviously teasing meant in good fun. To Owen, he said, “We knew Gydo up north, when she just was a skinny refugee kid. Kel taught her to use a spear.”
“That's right,” Kel confirmed. “She's a good kid, Owen.”
“A good woman,” he corrected. “But then,” he added, “I've always been lucky like that.”
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Post by Lisa on Apr 1, 2010 12:42:05 GMT 10
I'm grinning like a fool because this was such a perfect coming-of-age story, and I adore that their happily-ever-afters were so different from what I expected going in. Much more realistic, and much better.
This was awesome, and I'm so glad you wrote it!!
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Apr 1, 2010 13:11:02 GMT 10
Thank you SO MUCH for all the encouraging, thoughtful comments. I'm glad the story managed to surprise you a little, that it was a happy ending even though it's not what you expected, and so glad it was realistic. The fact that I was able to write anything for this round, let alone something this complex, was a complete surprise to me. If it actually worked, that's all bonus.
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Post by Alliecat on Apr 2, 2010 14:55:03 GMT 10
Awww, its so cute! I absolutely adore the ending, and how it works in ways I wouldn't have originally anticipated. This was a wonderful series! *hugs*
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Apr 2, 2010 22:27:51 GMT 10
Allie, thank you so much! I really appreciate the comments and feedback, and I'm delighted that you adore the ending, too.
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