domluvr
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Post by domluvr on May 8, 2010 0:08:11 GMT 10
Title: Watching Rating: G Prompt: #3- same but different. Category: 100 words Word count: 100 Summary: Raoul's jealous. Notes: My first ever drabble! This was hard! Sorry if it's confusing He leaned against the wall with his arms crossed, watching his sergeant talk to her quietly; making her laugh. It had been the same with the Kennan boy. Kel always maintained calm composure, but with a sweetheart, her eyes would light up; her easy smile was enough to melt his own heart. But Dom was different than Kennan. He could see it in the way she looked at him; the way she spoke of him. She respected him. He should be happy for them both. Turning to leave, he could only wish that he could light her up like that.
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Rowena
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Post by Rowena on May 8, 2010 6:30:25 GMT 10
DOM! *squees endlessly* I like Raoul's POV, especially referring to Cleon as "the Kennan boy" and insinuating that Kel didn't respect him. Mostly because Cleon annoyed me But good job! I love your interpretation of the prompt
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Post by greenie on May 8, 2010 9:09:48 GMT 10
Awww, poor Raoul. I think it's great how you had me thinking he was just being overprotective right up until the last line.
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domluvr
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Post by domluvr on May 8, 2010 11:07:25 GMT 10
Thanks guys! I'm glad Kel's lack of respect for Cleon shone through. I never really liked him either.I love Raoul. <3 That's what I was going for Ren! It's really hard to write exactly 100 words
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Post by Alliecat on May 8, 2010 11:12:49 GMT 10
Awwwww! Very cute ;D And Kennan boy is most definitely a fabulous name for Cleon.
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domluvr
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Post by domluvr on May 8, 2010 11:14:01 GMT 10
Thanks Allie! I thought so.
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