Rowena
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Post by Rowena on Jun 4, 2010 3:35:24 GMT 10
Title: Missed Rating: PG-13 Prompt: feelings and emotions Category: 100 words Word count: 100 words Summary: Dom knows what it is to miss someone. For Crystal (domluvr), although I doubt this is what she means by little Masbolles running around.
“When is Mama coming home?” Dom scooped his daughter up in his arms, running his hand over her dark hair, the only thing she had inherited from him. “She’s not, sweetie.” She furrowed her eyebrows in confusion. “What do you mean?” “She’s not coming home.” “Do we have to go get her?” “We can’t, honey.” “Where is she?” “The Peaceful Realms.” She seemed to think about this. “We can’t go get her?” “No, sweetie.” “And she’s never coming back?” “She can’t.” Understanding dawned on her face. “She’s gone.” Dom nodded. “I miss her,” she told him. “I miss her too.”
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Post by greenie on Jun 4, 2010 9:35:33 GMT 10
Awww. I think that you've written a child's not-quite-understanding perfectly, and the way that she shows her confusion. It's sad that Kel is dead, but I'm glad that at least Dom and their daughter have each other and Dom's not completely alone.
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Jun 4, 2010 9:43:24 GMT 10
Oh, wow. This is sad, but beautifully written.
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domluvr
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Post by domluvr on Jun 5, 2010 8:14:59 GMT 10
Eep! This is so pretty, I love it so much!! And I'm more than slightly reveling in the fact that it's for me by doing a happy dance around my room. Although I didn't picture Kel dead when the little Masbolles were running around. This actually made me tear up! And I totally agree with Ren, that you captured their daughter's innocence perfectly. And I get the feeling that Kel was alive long enough that she got to know her daughter, so Kel and Dom would have had a few years together. *watery smile* This was so beautiful! *exalts* ETA: I love love LOVE daddy!Dom ! ;D
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Rowena
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Post by Rowena on Jun 7, 2010 8:28:06 GMT 10
@ren--thanks, I'm glad the child's perspective seems okay, because I was afraid it might be too perceptive. @nicki--thank you! @crystal--eee! I'm glad you liked it I know the idea is happy Kel/Dom with their kids, but I think this works, right? I think my favorite part of this was imagining Dom's emotions, because he's going through so much but still caring for his daughter.
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Post by domluvr on Jun 7, 2010 9:01:08 GMT 10
*nods enthusiastically* Definitely works! And when he's caring for her, he's also being gently honest with her too! <3 Dom!
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Post by Verasque on Aug 18, 2010 20:25:08 GMT 10
This is so sad!
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Rowena
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Post by Rowena on Aug 27, 2010 0:30:52 GMT 10
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Post by ubiquitous on Aug 27, 2010 10:34:57 GMT 10
Aww, this is so sad.
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Rowena
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Post by Rowena on Aug 30, 2010 7:01:30 GMT 10
I know and thanks!
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