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Post by ev on Aug 4, 2010 5:25:13 GMT 10
Title: White Walls Rating: G Prompt: 3. walk in empty places, August 31_days Summary: Briar, Daja, and Sandry are there to help Tris out.
White walls, white sheets, white floors. Tris sighs. She relives the night before.
Terror. Complete terror. Tumbling. Feeling numb and useless, down, down, down. Go Sandry! As far as you can, faster! Tris jerks awake still paralyzed with numbness and shock. She can feel scurrying feet. Shouts of alarm are only distant. Tris feels weightless, she drifts towards a searing light…
Tris’s hand, shaking slightly, moves to the back of her head where there is a blood-soaked bandage. She sways, but remains standing. White walls, white sheets, white floors. Tris paces around her bed wanting to feel any life or color. None. Emptiness.
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Three ambient mages feel their friend regain consciousness, they glance at each other, then nod in unison.
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Tris’s eyes flash open. She barely utters a word until… green, lush green forests warp her vision. Red, Tris could feel the sizzle of a forge’s fire in the back of her eyes, palms, body. Cream, fresh wool, lavish silk with the touch of perfume, it smells invigorating.
No longer did Tris see, feel, or smell the dank, white walls in this sterile place, or the constant vacancy.
Thank you. Tris whispers.
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domluvr
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Post by domluvr on Aug 4, 2010 6:03:04 GMT 10
Absolutely beautiful.
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Post by ev on Aug 4, 2010 6:44:14 GMT 10
Thanks! ;D
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Rowena
Training Master
back to school... >.<
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Post by Rowena on Aug 4, 2010 7:45:59 GMT 10
Great description - very nicely done!
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Post by ev on Aug 4, 2010 9:28:00 GMT 10
Thank you ;D.
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Post by katieheidie on Aug 4, 2010 19:12:37 GMT 10
This is definitely my favorite of the three prompts you've done so far!
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Post by ev on Aug 5, 2010 6:22:22 GMT 10
Yes! ;D
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Post by PeroxidePirate on Sept 4, 2010 13:54:16 GMT 10
Oh, lovely!
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Post by ev on Sept 6, 2010 5:15:27 GMT 10
Thank you.
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Post by max on Sept 8, 2010 19:32:46 GMT 10
Can't believe I missed these before. I love the way you convey sensations.
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Post by ev on Sept 9, 2010 11:23:25 GMT 10
Thanks, I do try and work on my descriptions.
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