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Post by Strapless on Mar 21, 2009 14:29:09 GMT 10
Title: Indigo Rating: G Prompt: #1 - colour Summary: Miri struggles with horsemen's vocabulary. --- She didn’t care what Daine had told her—that pony definitely was not blue. Miri was fairly certain she knew what blue was. The crystalline turquoise of a calm sea, the stormy grayish hues of a coastal hurricane, the pale sky reflected in shallow tidepools, and the sharp monochrome contrast of the horizon. So what in the Wave Walker’s name was a blue roan? She squinted at the pony’s coat while the fellow rooted about her hands and pockets for the apples she had been armed with. Just as she suspected, not a hint of blue. Only a uniform black, shading from the head and legs with generous flecks of white hair that gave the impression of one solid color from a distance. Perhaps if she stood in the right light, squinted her eyes, and tilted her head it would make sense. All she managed to discover was the beginnings of a headache. In the end, she acquiesced to the higher authority. Considering she barely knew what to call all the body parts of her newly acquired mount, what color he was became the least of her worries. When asked what name she had bestowed on the pony, it was the second thought to come to mind that she gave in answer: Indigo. She just couldn’t bring herself to name him something so trite as Blue.
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Post by gogollescent on Mar 21, 2009 14:30:27 GMT 10
As someone who couldn't fathom why anyone would possibly call a perfectly good white horse grey, I really, really liked this.
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Post by ubiquitous on Mar 21, 2009 14:35:47 GMT 10
Yay for Miri!fic! I really liked this, especially the last line.
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Post by Katty on Mar 21, 2009 16:06:24 GMT 10
Yay for Rider fic A very lovely drabble.
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Post by rainstormamaya on Mar 22, 2009 10:23:46 GMT 10
Oh, I love this! Lovely backstory.
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Post by Anaroriel on Mar 22, 2009 14:24:32 GMT 10
I love your Rider fics, they're always humorous, light and interesting.
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Post by girlcalledsun on Mar 23, 2009 6:16:16 GMT 10
I love Miri's common sense attitude to these things! And indigo is a good name for a pony.
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Post by Lisa on Mar 23, 2009 11:40:02 GMT 10
Ah, Miri's literal-ness and common sense is perfect! I like Rider-fic....
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Post by Imogen on Mar 24, 2009 17:43:28 GMT 10
'She didn’t care what Daine had told her—that pony definitely was not blue.'
That first line is a winner. That's Miri, right there.
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Post by Strapless on Mar 25, 2009 2:26:54 GMT 10
Thank you, everyone! I've always enjoyed writing Miri the most, so I'm glad I still have the hang of it in a way readers also enjoy.
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Post by k4writer02 on Mar 30, 2009 7:03:08 GMT 10
Miri is awesome, and I liked this glimpse into her as she is learning to be a Rider and how to think about her pony. I really liked the way she thought about the sea, in the middle of this new life she'd chosen. Really cool!
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Post by mistrali on Dec 6, 2012 5:19:10 GMT 10
*chuckles* I love the references to the various shades of blue in the sea!
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Post by Kris11 on Dec 25, 2012 15:40:48 GMT 10
I loved this! Like everyone has mentioned, your characterization of Miri is spot-on. I can picture her exactly where she is in the Immortals series, with all her confusion and determination. I loved this descriptive paragraph: "Miri was fairly certain she knew what blue was. The crystalline turquoise of a calm sea, the stormy grayish hues of a coastal hurricane, the pale sky reflected in shallow tidepools, and the sharp monochrome contrast of the horizon." It is beautiful, first-off, and it gives us her character and past in a unique way. Lovely way to contrast all that she was to everything she is trying to become.
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