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Post by Seek on Sept 12, 2010 0:46:05 GMT 10
Title: A Fool's Bargain Rating: PG Prompt: #34 Trick Summary: It isn't just the Trickster that plays tricks.
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Take me, he pleads, kneeling by the bed where his friend cries out and stirs and coughs and bleeds, and where the palace healer shakes his head in resignation, an exchange, take me, not him -
He tosses, in a sea of delirium, catching flashes of blond shadows, shy, taciturn, and forever lost; he barely remembers the chapel, the white flowers, only, each time his head breaks the surface of the choking image-waves, that the Black God takes with two hands -
He is alive (for now), he has the fever, and Francis is dead.
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Post by journeycat on Sept 12, 2010 1:09:19 GMT 10
The imagery in this is incredible, and the whole thing is powerful. Amazing job, Seek!
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Rowena
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Post by Rowena on Sept 12, 2010 1:53:11 GMT 10
*sniffle* Wow. Lovely job of getting inside Raoul's (I'm guessing it's Raoul?) head. And really lovely imagery, as Mandi said
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Post by Seek on Sept 12, 2010 20:59:52 GMT 10
Thanks guys! ;D Yes, it's Raoul (I seem to be on a Raoul/Francis roll, recently!) and it's pretty much because I was trying to go for the image overload of fever-hallucinations
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Post by max on Sept 12, 2010 21:40:05 GMT 10
It works. Seriously.
This is incredible on sooooooooooooo many levels.
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Post by Seek on Sept 13, 2010 0:29:23 GMT 10
Thanks *is happy that you like it*
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Post by ev on Sept 13, 2010 4:18:03 GMT 10
Whoa, this is so striking and sad. Perfectly done!
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Post by Cass on Sept 13, 2010 11:07:30 GMT 10
This is amazing! The imagery is gorgeous.
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Post by Seek on Sept 13, 2010 18:15:09 GMT 10
Thanks guys!
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Post by wordy on Sept 13, 2010 18:50:52 GMT 10
This is a great snapshot of such an emotional moment! I particularly like how the ending is kind of vague: He is alive (for now).
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Post by Seek on Sept 14, 2010 19:59:31 GMT 10
Yay! You picked up on it! Thanks Em! You have made my day ;D
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