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Post by max on Jan 16, 2013 19:25:43 GMT 10
Title: A far green country Rating: PG MPP: #76 -- New Beginnings Summary: Some things are inexorable, except. Seaver-centric.
Neal is the first to tell him of the seven year rule. The way the body renews itself entirely after seven years, replenishing all bone and sinew and blood ‘As if you are being made by the Gods afresh: reincarnation, incarnate.’
On the eighth anniversary and the dizzy brink of a new, northern war he feels as if he has never been so aware of his body before. Not in battle, certainly not in love. Every nerve alive and dancing with a hot-cold radiance that somehow shows, in the way his knight-master asks how he slept; in the way his knight-master’s daughter calls him by his name in a hallway and touches the back of her hand against his brow. He tells them he is fine – he is alive – but when he is dismissed that evening he washes his face in cool water and looks up in a mirror to meet his eyes glowing back at him, burning, dark, as coals.
The Black God keeps his own perimeters.
Sooner than he thinks, he knows, his father will have been alive for only a handful of years in the vast expanse of his long, long life, and the hurt will have been so long ago he will be able to talk of it as if it happened to someone else (and according to Neal, this is actually true).
But he can’t yet.
Gods above, he can’t yet.
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Kris11
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Post by Kris11 on Jan 17, 2013 9:13:22 GMT 10
Oh, my goodness. Those last two lines actually made me rock back in my chair. I loved the way you decided to tell this story, with the context of the first paragraph only revealed in passing at the end. It was captivating and the emotions felt so real, and gah. Let me love you.
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Post by max on Jan 20, 2013 8:03:42 GMT 10
Thank you!!!!!
I'm glad you liked it (especially, y'know, as I haven't written anything in ages and wrote this in my hotel room in 30 minutes...)
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Post by wordy on Jan 22, 2013 16:22:43 GMT 10
Ah, you have such a way with words, max! I love how you've managed to weave so many complex emotions and hints into this piece (like Neal and his grief, about his brothers, I assume? It's kind of lovely and heartbreaking that he and Seaver have death to bond over.). Gorgeous.
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Post by max on Jan 29, 2013 9:04:00 GMT 10
Thank you!
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housewife
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Post by housewife on Feb 11, 2013 10:27:37 GMT 10
It has taken me a while and a couple of readings to understand, but oh, I think I get it now and it is all the more beautiful.
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Post by max on Feb 13, 2013 7:23:02 GMT 10
Thank you -- sorry for the lack of understanding though -- I like, wrote a 31_days thing a couple of years back which delved deeply into my headcanon of Seaver's life, so I sort of take what's known about him, canonically, a bit for granted now lol..
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