opalgirl
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Post by opalgirl on Oct 11, 2009 12:45:06 GMT 10
Title: Rather an Ally Than An Enemy Rating: PG Prompt: #6 - Puzzles. Summary: Jon finds himself confronted with someone he would much rather have as an ally; set post-LR. Notes: An extension of one of my One Sentence entries.
"Don't upset Her Highness again," Buri – who is, he's learned, all of thirteen – growls, staring at him as if he's the enemy. "Or I'll hurt you."
He opens his mouth to speak, but she plants her boots squarely on the floor and glares at him: half-wild, in a foreign place, and free to speak her mind.
"You, Your Majesty, are not my king; I owe you no oath. You can't do worse to me than what the warlord's already done. I came with Thayet, for her – not for you."
Jon already has the sense that having the little K'mir as an ally would be better than having her as an enemy and this only proves it. "Buri?" he calls, as she turns to leave and return to Thayet.
She turns her head and regards him. "I don't answer to your beck and call," she growls, finally – as if she needs to remind him - and folds her arms across her chest. "What?"
"You're welcome here; I'd be glad if you'd make Tortall your home."
She only scowls at him and leaves, muttering. Jon wonders if he got anywhere at all with her, and decides not to think about it. He'll ask Thayet.
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Post by greenie on Oct 11, 2009 14:29:48 GMT 10
Hee, this is so cute! In a grumpy/taken aback sort of a way.
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Post by Verasque on Oct 11, 2009 15:11:40 GMT 10
This was so great! I like the undecided voice at the end; stayed true to Buri, and to Jon, too
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Post by theantichris on Oct 11, 2009 18:10:16 GMT 10
I love this! Young, wary Buri is so awesome.
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Post by ubiquitous on Oct 11, 2009 22:08:03 GMT 10
This is so cute! And Buri is way cool in this!
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aurorax
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Post by aurorax on Feb 1, 2010 12:37:32 GMT 10
Thanks for linking this, it's exactly what I had in mind. Buri is perfectly in-character here, especially considering how young she is when she first arrives in Tortall, which I always seem to forget. She has such a strong personality even when she's older and presumably learned a bit more tact that I can totally see her ignoring Jon just because she can at the start, and enjoying the fact that she doesn't have to listen to him like everyone else. I love the slight tinge of jealousy that comes through, and Buri's protectiveness of Thayet, but my favorite in this is actually how you wrote Jon- you can see the beginnings of what will make him a great king, since he knows who its important to have on his side, even when he's angry, and of course he understands when to turn to Thayet for advice. All the characterization is really lovely.
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